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Scootaloo woke up with a shiver of the body from the cold air in the room. The lamp was still on, although the morning light had overtaken its role. She also noticed that she was still lying under Copperbolt's wing, though it seemed rather cold. Of course Copperbolt must have been freezing through the night, seeing as Scootaloo fell asleep while leaning up against her, so she could not reach out and grab her own blanket to pull over. It was just like her mother's kind heart to let her sleep like that, even though it meant for her to freeze herself.

The filly then looked back up at the brown mare's face to see how she was doing, smiling at how peaceful she seemed. Copperbolt seemed to sleep like a log, and judging by the wide and sweet smile on her face, she must be dreaming the most amazing of dreams. Steadily and quietly, Scootaloo dragged herself out from under the wing, so as to not wake up Copperbolt. She reached out behind the brown mare and got the blanket between her teeth, and then proceeded to cover her mother all the way up to her neck, slowly and neatly.

Letting her breath seep out between her almost closed lips, Scootaloo took a second glance at her mother's smile, wanting to see just how sweet and peaceful she looked while sleeping. True enough, she looked like the happiest of ponies, but this time Scootaloo also noticed something off: Weird stripes from the corner of her eyes, running along her face downwards and ending in a small spot on the pillow that had a darker shade than the rest of it. She had been crying, that much Scootaloo could tell, but as to why she had done it, and how she could have without waking her up, the young filly had no idea.

"Mom?" Scootaloo said with a sweet and low voice, still smiling even though she was a bit worried about the tear tracks. "Wake up mom. Did you have a bad dream?"

The mare did not react in the slightest, still lying with the same sweet smile locked on her lips. Using one of her hooves, Scootaloo gave her a gentle nudge in an attempt to physically get her up, but all that moved on Copperbolt's body was because of this very nudge. "It's morning mom. There's a clear blue sky and all. You really wanna sleep through this?"

Still nothing. At this point, Scootaloo was beginning to feel a little worried. Sure, Copperbolt can sleep deeply too, but she usually wakes up after being called out to, or at least reacts to Scootaloo's voice. "Mom? Mom, get up will you? You're starting to freak me out."

The smile on Copperbolt's face suddenly lost all meaning, while the dark tear tracers became Scootaloo's point of interest. There was definitely something wrong. Her cold body was even colder, and her fur seemed dull and bleak compared to its ordinary radiance. The filly's smile was gradually changing into an expression of panic as she began pushing harder and with two hooves instead of just one. "Mom, wake up! Please, mom, you're scaring me here! It's not funny!"

It was almost provocative how the mare's expression stayed still no matter how much she was being shaking around by the frightened filly, whose voice was becoming louder and more panicky by the second, and whose eyes kept getting more and more watery. "Mom! Mom! Please wake up!"

After a while, Scootaloo decided to stop with the showing and instead try to make the final test. She was panting, sweat running from her forehead as she looked to the chest of the pegasus. Biting her own lips, the filly finally managed to muster enough courage to remove the blanket and pressed her ear against the cold fur. She could not hear a heartbeat. She stayed like that for longer than was necessary to confirm her terrible suspicion, desperately listening for the drumming sound that was supposed to come, fruitless as it was.

"No…" she whimpered with a squeaky little voice. "No, mom… Don't do this… DON'T DO THIS!!"

She cast her hooves around the cold mare's head, screaming and letting out endless streams of her own tears, never intending to let go. "You said you wouldn't leave me, remember!!? You said there was no way you'd leave me!! Was that a lie!!? Did you lie, mom!!? Why did you lie, mom!!? WHY DID YOU LIE!!! MOM! MOM! PLEASE WAKE UP!! MOM, PLEASE WAKE UP!!"

For hours this was the mantra for the orange filly. She screamed, she cried, she pleaded and she even tried begging Celestia for help, though not even she had ever been able to bring anypony back like that. Helplessly sitting alone with what used to be her mother, Scootaloo spent the worst day of her life, sobbing.
Part 6.

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:iconninosmr:
Ninosmr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
over the past 7 years or so, I have had many bad things happen to me, and have been broken up with and turned down, had my some of my friends turned against me, and have been ridiculed, harassed, had made fun of more times than I care to remember, and never once have I cried in those 7 years, until now
(last time being when my dog died)
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
You held out well though :P
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brianshrode72 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012
I knew this was going to happen ever since before I read the first sentence of part 1. I already read "The Warmth Under Your Wings." I knew it was coming, but I still cried like a baby!
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Fuzzy797 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I knew it was coming but dammit I still cried like a baby... Why you do this to me
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I'm a wicked, wicked man ;) Nah, just kidding. It's my way of saying "If Scootaloo doesn't get an episode, I will forever believe that it's because it's too cruel to show in a kids show. Please bring us an episode of her!"
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yayayayayala Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012
Eeyup.

I knew it.

I knew this would happen.

I just knew it.
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012
I didn't want to hide it too much. Gotta prepare people for such things.
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skannersnake Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012
I know tonight, just as I'm about to fall asleep, this will pop in my head and make me cry.
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:iconaskesalsa:
askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
I tend to give people nightmares one way or another ;)
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skannersnake Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
So can I expect the next story to be a grimdark?
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
Hay no! It's more like it's my very person that gives people nightmares XD

But the one I'm working on now does contain some relatively dark moments, though no bloodspill or zombies or the like :P Guess you could call it light-grimdark.
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skannersnake Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
You sound like a very nice person. Can't wait for the next story.
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012
*blushes* thank you ^^ you definitely sound nice too
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skannersnake Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012
Actually dude, I am REALLY violent. :chainsaw:
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brianshrode72 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012
O.o
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Manic-Moon Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012
OMG! this is pretty hard stoff. you nearly got me crying this time.
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:iconaskesalsa:
askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012
Dammit. One got away. I'll get you sometimes ^^
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Manic-Moon Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012
donīt blame yourself. the only story that managed to make me cry is this one [link]
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012
I bet there used to be a story there. But yeah, an empty page is definitely gruesome ^^
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Manic-Moon Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012
sorry, the link doesnīt work like it should. try this one [link]
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Manic-Moon Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012
DAMNIT!!! the title of the story is " Today, Tomorrow and Forever ", just look for it at Equestria Daily.com
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Zephyr357 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Fuck... Now I'm tearing up...
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012
Good thing it's just a fanfic, huh? :)
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Zephyr357 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm very glad I've read the rest now :)
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:iconaskesalsa:
askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012
Indeed. A little happy on all the sappy ^^
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Captain-Savage Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
T^T manly tears were shed
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:iconaskesalsa:
askesalsa Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
In which case I did my job ;)
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Fjspawn Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012
Take all of my tears, every damn one [link]
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:iconaskesalsa:
askesalsa Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Now they're mine! ^^
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Fjspawn Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Well you deserve them, this story is incredibly well done, and this turning point was perfect. Reading this story, I've thought about my own mom and how precious it is spending time with those you care about because one minute they are there with you, and the next, well you know. Keep up the good work ;)
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Wow thanks :) I'll do my best ^^
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oblivion2k Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012
Oh god, ow my heart ><
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:iconaskesalsa:
askesalsa Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012
Mission accomplished ^^
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10218530 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2012
dammit i never cry
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:iconaskesalsa:
askesalsa Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012
Mission accomplished it seems ;)
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thegrimgravy Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012
Man dont you get teared up or anything while writing these stories?
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012
I get teared up when I think the thought for the first time. You can't imagine how many times I've had to tell someone in public that I'm just tired or that I got something in my eye or something XD
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videogamehunter Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
great now I'm crying. This is too much for Scootaloo to handle.
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:iconaskesalsa:
askesalsa Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Eeyup, she doesn't have it easy.
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Happybloodsucker Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
omg omg this is, ack omg , crying a lot
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VinnySabatini Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
Manly tears, man
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little-miss-brony Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Me sad
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